Discussion
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Comments
Excellent start to the paper. You have some good critique dialog present, but right now there isn't enough critique. Most of the writing should be your interpretation and analysis of the research, so avoid making the study summaries too long. In this draft you have a bit too much summary.
In future drafts you will want to start synthesizing the research studies in a more holistic way, by comparing and contrasting the studies in a continuous flow of analysis.
Your writing is good and understandable in this draft. It flows very well, but at times sounds too much like an oral conversation, so try to make it a bit more formal.
Goal setting is too broad of a topic, so you'll need to narrow it based on what you have already reviewed. Narrowing it just to team sports would not be narrow enough, so you'll need to focus it even more so that you are reviewing all of the recent research. Make sure you're exhausting all of the databases as you search this topic. You didn't include all of the potential references you are going to use, so I can't comment on how that is looking.
You have all of the elements and concepts of a good paper, but more depth and cohesiveness is needed in the dialog. Plus, you have a few more studies to review. By cohesiveness, I am referring to making a more intimate connection between the studies in your discussion. Basically, include more comparison and contrast of multiple studies; also, draw conclusions based on these.
Develop a slightly longer introductions that outlines the purpose of the paper ("to review research") and defines the topic.
The grammar is professional writing style is much better in this draft. Continue to make improvements in this area and polish the grammar.
The final paper will need a rewrite of the title, to something that is more descriptive, like "A Review of . . ."
An abstract is needed.
Format: The paper needs format improvement. The APA referencing format looks fairly good, although there are some minor mistakes on some of the in-text citations and on the reference list.