Discussion
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Comments
Based on what you have submitted, I can tell that you are way off track with this assignment. This paper is to be a review of the research literature related to your topic. You are writing it as if it is a report on the subject. Please review the guidelines in the "Apply" section of the learning guide again and redesign the paper.
Work on improving the grammar and write in a more formal way.
Also, you need to delete the file attachment before you publish this because your should not be re-disseminating this copyrighted work.
You don't include a complete list of references, so unfortunately I can't comment on the what you intend to review.
Right now, your paper is reading more like a report on the subject instead of a review of the research. You have some interesting information, but it is way off topic for the requirements of the paper. The main purpose is to critique and evaluate the research articles, not educate the reader about what the subject is. Because of this, you are going to have to revamp your entire paper, and I'm concerned you don't have time to do this.
You need to delete the attached articles before publishing your final draft, as I mentioned int the last feedback.