Discussion
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Comments
You have two decent research studies present in this paper. Most of the writing should be your interpretation and analysis of the research, so avoid making the study summaries too long. In this draft you have a bit too much summary.
The main thing I am concerned with in this draft is a lack of topic focus. You are not focusing specifically on the information related to addiction in running in the studies you are reviewing. Perhaps you need to adjust the title. Also, the introductory information should set the tone and lead-in to the review of research. Clearly indicate this is a review of the research literature on the topic. You don't include a complete list of references, so unfortunately I can't comment on the what you intend to review. This further make me worried about the topic selection.
In future drafts you will want to start synthesizing the research studies in a more holistic way, by comparing and contrasting the studies in a continuous flow of analysis. Reviewing one study after the other is not a good way to write the review.
I have a few questions concerning the expectations for this paper. I'm perfectly willing to change my whole paper if it's not what you are looking for, but i'd prefer not to. My first question, is am I trying to be persuasive in this paper, or am I strictly supposed to compare and contrast literature that is published on the topic? My next question is what will be considered a "complete list of references"? Does this list include all references I can find, or just the ones I use in my paper? Oh and about how many different pieces of literature should I review in order to maximize my grade potential? I'm trying very hard to do well on this paper, so these clarifications will be necessary for me to be successful. Sorry if you feel like you are repeating anything that you've already said before, but i'm not sure why I'm confused about what to be doing on this. Thanks a ton for your time!